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Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
http://news.bbc.co.uk/1/hi/england/b...re/4850164.stm
If ever you felt that someone DESERVED a custodial sentence, this was it.
I have a little faith again in our justice system.
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28 Mar 2006, 00:35
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
she's 14.
one big question.
who made her that way?
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28 Mar 2006, 00:40
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
how does banning someone underage from driving for a time period work, because surely they aren't allowed to drive until they're 17 anyway, so the banned length of time up until they are 17 has no effect. Or does it work differently to that?
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28 Mar 2006, 01:03
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette .
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Originally Posted by vampire_lestat
how does banning someone underage from driving for a time period work, because surely they aren't allowed to drive until they're 17 anyway, so the banned length of time up until they are 17 has no effect. Or does it work differently to that?
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28 Mar 2006, 06:30
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette .
probably means they can slap her with a much harsher sentence if she does it again.
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28 Mar 2006, 06:58
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
Black later admitted taking a vehicle without consent, driving without a licence, drink-driving and driving while disqualified.
How was she disqualified from driving if she's 12?
So she'd ALREADY been disqualified! And then again! She's going to have a lot of insurance to pay when she's 17
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28 Mar 2006, 08:26
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
hanging's too good for house-price-raising, asylum-seeking scum like her!!
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28 Mar 2006, 10:51
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
Instead of ASBOs they should hand out 'sterilisation orders'.
The benefits to society would be tremendous.
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28 Mar 2006, 10:54
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
Why didnt they prosecute her for attacking the prosecutor (lols) and throwing water about the place. Contempt of court / assault / etc
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28 Mar 2006, 10:56
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
"The court heard that on the night of 13 February, Black drank three cans of lager and then stole her father's car keys before driving off in his car to her sister Lilly's house."
What was in those cans then? I reckon Dace spiked her drink.
Also, at 12 years old, she shouldnt be able to drive anyway, she wont see over the dashboard the poor girl.
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28 Mar 2006, 11:01
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Also, at 12 years old, she shouldnt be able to drive anyway, she wont see over the dashboard the poor girl.
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
no pic?
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28 Mar 2006, 12:01
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Instead of ASBOs they should hand out 'sterilisation orders'.
The benefits to society would be tremendous.
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28 Mar 2006, 12:07
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Because Europe's birth rate is already dangerously high!
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28 Mar 2006, 12:09
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Why didnt they prosecute her for attacking the prosecutor (lols) and throwing water about the place. Contempt of court / assault / etc
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because what would be the point???
Lawyers and judges and clerks and even magistrates seem more liberal and practical than the posters in this thread (symm, dante and t&f exempt)
and when you find yourself being less liberal than a magistrate you know you're only one step away from annexing the sudaten land
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28 Mar 2006, 12:10
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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One day dante all the girls will be slightly black
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my grandmother always said that I had a "touch of the tar-brush"
but it's more the lips than my palid complexion i think
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28 Mar 2006, 12:13
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
Personally I don't think this ruling went far enough. The streets should run red with blood for such an outrage against our good and just society.
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28 Mar 2006, 13:09
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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One day dante all the girls will be slightly black
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28 Mar 2006, 13:20
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette .
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because what would be the point???
Lawyers and judges and clerks and even magistrates seem more liberal and practical than the posters in this thread (symm, dante and t&f exempt)
and when you find yourself being less liberal than a magistrate you know you're only one step away from annexing the sudaten land
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the Sudetenland, not sudaten.
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette .
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the Sudetenland, not sudaten.
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28 Mar 2006, 13:53
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
wog talk innit
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
I would shag her up zhe bum
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28 Mar 2006, 18:17
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Instead of ASBOs they should hand out 'sterilisation orders'.
The benefits to society would be tremendous.
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28 Mar 2006, 18:27
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
Thirded and passed.
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28 Mar 2006, 18:30
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
she should be shot, her parents should also be shot, and possibly her sister and any other siblings to stop the genes from being passed on
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
I'm sure this forum used to be more tolerant
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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she's 14.
one big question.
who made her that way?
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Not our problem. She should be put to sleep.
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It'd be easer to have a room inside every young offender block, the room would permeate institutional terror. The smell of bleech clings in the air. A nondescript door is opened and the girl is thrown in shackled but still defiantly screaming.
Eventually she lifts her head and takes in the scene, 12 ft away on a grubby orange plastic chair sits a bearded man, he watches her with an insane intensity. He sits naked apart from a pair of leather shoes. A sick perverted smirk spreads on dace's face. Those that scream on the outside scream so much more on the inside. Dace needs them to scream. The room is 12ft by 12 ft, a starkly lit sarcophagus whose pitted mortar is little more than the final violent fingerprints of so so many naughty children.
It was beautiful solution, those that preyed on the innocent were satisfied by those that weren't so innocent.
He takes off his shoes and places the chair upside down to protect them, this one'll be bloody. The girl doesn't know what to do, the queerness of the situation hits her with the intensity of her first period. A look of terror spreads across her face, she wriggles in her shackles but that just makes them tighter emphasising her svelte nubile form.
He stands and inhales deeply filling his lungs and letting out a feral groan that echoes endlessly. The girl wets herself his keen eye sight picks on it immediately his dark mind delludes him even further. Shes wet. She wants it. Not even shit puts him off.
He takes a step forward.
She screams from the pit of her stomach. A howl of utter dispear.
Dace gets an erection.
we'll all you hang her beat the shit out of her lot may as well put it in an 'artistic' form
<3 dace really its all for fun
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Black later admitted taking a vehicle without consent, driving without a licence, drink-driving and driving while disqualified.
How was she disqualified from driving if she's 12?
So she'd ALREADY been disqualified! And then again! She's going to have a lot of insurance to pay when she's 17
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I can't answer for British law, however, we have similar situations in California.
Driving is a priviledge and it is the driving privilege which is suspended.
In California driving without a license is a lesser crime when compared to driving with your driving priviledge suspended. The punishment is usually quite a bit harsher.
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette .
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I'm sure this forum used to be more tolerant
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That was back in the days when I decided everyone's opinions for them. Things sure were a lot more rational back then
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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It'd be easer to have a room inside every young offender block, the room would permeate institutional terror. The smell of bleech clings in the air. A nondescript door is opened and the girl is thrown in shackled but still defiantly screaming.
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You should have a paragraph after the first half of the first sentence, not a comma.
Bleach
What is the point of describing something as "nondescript"? It adds nothing to the atmosphere.
What's so defiant about a scream?
Also, what girl? If you haven't already introduced someone you shouldn't refer to them as "the".
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Eventually she lifts her head and takes in the scene, 12 ft away on a grubby orange plastic chair sits a bearded man, he watches her with an insane intensity. He sits naked apart from a pair of leather shoes. A sick perverted smirk spreads on dace's face. Those that scream on the outside scream so much more on the inside. Dace needs them to scream. The room is 12ft by 12 ft, a starkly lit sarcophagus whose pitted mortar is little more than the final violent fingerprints of so so many naughty children.
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"He sit's naked" should be "He is naked", you have already said he was sitting.
You should have left the fact that he was Dace till the end, it would have been better for building tension. As it is after you identify the character the rest of it writes itself. Also, I don't think he has a beard any more (I could be wrong).
You used a full stop where you didn't need to before "Dace needs them to scream", a semicolon would have worked better.
How can he be sitting 12 ft away when the room is only 12ft long? It seems unlikely. Also, you said 12ft three times now, no need to repeat it.
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It was beautiful solution, those that preyed on the innocent were satisfied by those that weren't so innocent.
He takes off his shoes and places the chair upside down to protect them, this one'll be bloody. The girl doesn't know what to do, the queerness of the situation hits her with the intensity of her first period. A look of terror spreads across her face, she wriggles in her shackles but that just makes them tighter emphasising her svelte nubile form.
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Why was he wearing shoes in the first place? Just so you could place them behind the chair after turning it over? Pointless, adds nothing.
Using the word "queerness" is bad, it puts ideas of homosexuality into the head due to current vernacular. Adding extra perversity to paedophilia just seems silly and takes the attention away from the situation.
You have also said "spread's across her/Dace's face" twice now. Poor practice.
For the last bit you should have started a new sentence after face, and put a comma after "tighter". It reads too fast as it is, not giving time for the image to sink into the reader's consciousness.
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He stands and inhales deeply filling his lungs and letting out a feral groan that echoes endlessly. The girl wets herself his keen eye sight picks on it immediately his dark mind delludes him even further. Shes wet. She wants it. Not even shit puts him off.
He takes a step forward.
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A freal groan? What is feral about a groan? A growl perhaps, but not a groan.
Also, nothing can echo endlessly, if you said "which seemed to her to echo endlessly" it would make sense. And something is even less likely to echo in a room that's only 12ft by 12ft.
The next sentence is just terrible; you talk about the girl, then Dace. At the very least you need a comma after "herself" but even then it sounds wrong. Also, it should be "picks up on it" rather than "picks on it". The last part of the sentence is even worse, it should be three sentences rather than one.
Deludes
Also, deludes further? You have given no evidence that he is deluded at all so far.
She's
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She screams from the pit of her stomach. A howl of utter dispear.
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You don't scream from your stomach, you scream from your lungs. Fear can come from your stomach but a scream is merely an indication of such fear.
Despair.
The last sentence is OK.
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we'll all you hang her beat the shit out of her lot may as well put it in an 'artistic' form
<3 dace really its all for fun
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I'd rather people not put it in an artistic form than offend my eyes with bad art.
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your criticisms are like little laser blasts of hate the slice my heart to shreds
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
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Capital letter.
That.
Full stop.
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You should have a paragraph after the first half of the first sentence, not a comma.
Bleach
What is the point of describing something as "nondescript"? It adds nothing to the atmosphere.
What's so defiant about a scream?
Also, what girl? If you haven't already introduced someone you shouldn't refer to them as "the".
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nondescript was to indicate the room had an anonymity within the building, it didn't stand out because society didn't want what happened there to stand out.
what the **** isn't defiant about a scream? how else would a shackled person be defiant? fart?
the girl isn't important its just another girl.
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"He sit's naked" should be "He is naked", you have already said he was sitting.
You should have left the fact that he was Dace till the end, it would have been better for building tension. As it is after you identify the character the rest of it writes itself. Also, I don't think he has a beard any more (I could be wrong).
You used a full stop where you didn't need to before "Dace needs them to scream", a semicolon would have worked better.
How can he be sitting 12 ft away when the room is only 12ft long? It seems unlikely. Also, you said 12ft three times now, no need to repeat it.
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ok hes naked then
i was writing it ad hoc, and ive only ever seen one or two photographs of him, faggot
im not an editor
he sits 12ft away in a 12ft room, wtf is wrong with saying that? she wasn't thrown 6 ft into the bloody room!
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Why was he wearing shoes in the first place? Just so you could place them behind the chair after turning it over? Pointless, adds nothing.
Using the word "queerness" is bad, it puts ideas of homosexuality into the head due to current vernacular. Adding extra perversity to paedophilia just seems silly and takes the attention away from the situation.
You have also said "spread's across her/Dace's face" twice now. Poor practice.
For the last bit you should have started a new sentence after face, and put a comma after "tighter". It reads too fast as it is, not giving time for the image to sink into the reader's consciousness.
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HES A ****ING PERVERT I DON'T KNOW WHY HES ONLY WEARING SHOES, IT ADDS TO THE WEIRDO ATMOSPHERE. Ever hear why tarantino put the hamburger conversation in pulp fiction?
i added queerness because i liked it
go **** a frog
your mind is drugged slow
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A freal groan? What is feral about a groan? A growl perhaps, but not a groan.
Also, nothing can echo endlessly, if you said "which seemed to her to echo endlessly" it would make sense. And something is even less likely to echo in a room that's only 12ft by 12ft.
The next sentence is just terrible; you talk about the girl, then Dace. At the very least you need a comma after "herself" but even then it sounds wrong. Also, it should be "picks up on it" rather than "picks on it". The last part of the sentence is even worse, it should be three sentences rather than one.
Deludes
Also, deludes further? You have given no evidence that he is deluded at all so far.
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FERAL OMG YOU MADE A SPELLING MISTAKE, a feral groan is a groan of a feral nature.
shes about to have horrible things done to her, her sense of reality is warped. It echoed endlessly.
your mother is terrible
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Despair.
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Fear doesn't come from your stomach its an emotion thats described however the **** you want it to be. Her scream came from her stomach just like singers are taught to sing from deep in their stomach and not their throat. You stick your diaphram into it you ****.
**** you feral
your mother is ok
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Capital letter.
That.
Full stop.
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A karaoke supernova
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Re: Im really sorry, i promise not to do it again. Im not really a scumbag chavette ..
You seem to have a problem with constructive criticism.
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im never ****ing mentioning tarantulas to nodrog again!
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If you actually took what I said on board instead of being silly about it all then the next time you write something it could be less shit.
As it is it looks like you're doomed to be rubbish forever
I'm being serious here btw, I truly believe that my comments could be helpful. If you still refuse to be grown up about it I can actually reply to all your comments on the post a bit further up, but I really shouldn't have to.
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Sorry, I'm going to have to cut in on your action Deepflow. It's irritating me too.
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nondescript was to indicate the room had an anonymity within the building, it didn't stand out because society didn't want what happened there to stand out.
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I wish I could say that about my relationships!
Very indecisive! You should have said something like "sometimes he uses his shoes to spank the worst ones for being naughty". Then he becomes a perverted and kinky paedophile.
Clearly!
Yet you said you were writing an editor's edit?
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he sits 12ft away in a 12ft room, wtf is wrong with saying that? she wasn't thrown 6 ft into the bloody room!
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A room is 12 foot long. Allowing for some space between the chair that Dace is sitting on and that Dace is facing the door, Dace's feet must be about 10 foot away from the door. It'd be far more realistic to say that she was ~8 foot away from him.
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HES A ****ING PERVERT I DON'T KNOW WHY HES ONLY WEARING SHOES, IT ADDS TO THE WEIRDO ATMOSPHERE. Ever hear why tarantino put the hamburger conversation in pulp fiction?
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No, but I'm sure you do.
I think the point that Deepflow is trying to make is that you were trying to emphasise too many things at once. Find a point to make and create a scene, but make sure all of the scene illustrates the point.
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Many people like queerness.
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FERAL OMG YOU MADE A SPELLING MISTAKE, a feral groan is a groan of a feral nature.
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That's a bit childish (and extremely poorly punctuated).
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shes about to have horrible things done to her, her sense of reality is warped. It echoed endlessly.
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You're just re-emphasising the point that SHE THOUGHT that the echo was endless.
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and your mother must make your sandwiches for school each day.
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Fear doesn't come from your stomach its an emotion thats described however the **** you want it to be. Her scream came from her stomach just like singers are taught to sing from deep in their stomach and not their throat. You stick your diaphram into it you ****.
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Scientifically, the scream still came from her lungs. Singers are taught to sing "from their stomach" as they then learn to use the full expanse of their lungs and therefore can make a louder sound when singing, I guess.
Fear can be described however you want, but it's best described in ways people can relate to.
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Scientifically, the scream still came from her lungs.
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no it didn't.
now stop all this boring bollocks. if you think milo's post was shit you can neg rep him rather than bore the rest of us with your half arsed pedantry.
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Gosh Henry sure is in a bad mood tonight.
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no it didn't.
now stop all this boring bollocks. if you think milo's post was shit you can neg rep him rather than bore the rest of us with your half arsed pedantry.
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close thread, ban daily-mail-reading-scum.
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close thread, ban daily-mail-reading-scum.
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I bet it wasn't just in the Daily Mail. But yes, you're probably right
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this thread took a wonderful turn
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i thought i'd post again because someone was so enthralled with my last one <3
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probably means they can slap her with a much harsher sentence if she does it again.
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Hey getting a bit angry there Rids. She's just a kid and kids are stupid. I did stupid things when I was young, I am sure we all did. I'm not sure what custody will do to make things better.
In terms of throwing stuff in the court room I like her attitude, why should be she happy about receiving a custodial sentence after her parents grassed her up?
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I did a lot of stupid things when I was a kid, drink driving, underage driving, and taking without consent were not on my list of stupid things though.
The girl is not going to change, a custodial sentence is going to do her any good, I cant see her suddenly reforming her ways after spending a few months in juvy. Hell, everybody I know that ever went to juvy came out a hell of a lot worse than when they went in.
But what is the solution then? I've known a lot of people that have been to prison, a lot of people, most of them are back up to the same old stuff they were doing before they were nicked, some of them are into worse things, only one person has actually reformed and I suspect that is as much down to the birth of his baby boy as it was being inside.
Personally, smacking some sense into the girl might be a step in the right direction, maybe it wont, but I think its becoming pretty clear that the prison system isnt really an effective deterant these days.
(Bare in mind, I'm not as well educated as the majority of people on this forum, and havent really done any research into the % of people that go on to reoffend etc, I'm just basing this on my experience, so if I'm talking shit, feel free to point it out)
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Annual cost per offender of 1 Year Custodial sentence in Feltham (or equivalent YOI)
= £42,000 (source: NACRO)
Annual cost of 1 year education at Eton College (Boys - boarding)
= £23,550 (figure for 2005, source: Eton College)
Annual cost of 1 year education at Cheltenham Ladies' College (Girls -boarding)
= £21,729 (figure 2005, source CLC: NB fee is £24,477 if over 16)
Can we all guess what my argument is for dealing with young offenders?
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Can we all guess what my argument is for dealing with young offenders?
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