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Unread 6 Aug 2008, 21:34   #24
Knight Theamion
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Re: The Beer Goggle Pill

Good story. The beginning needs to be reworked though, the whole steve thing isn't matching nicely here, you should try and make him come back 'in your memory' a few times during the andy episode and maybe rewrite the last part to

'and here I was, telling Andy the 'goods' ... how he could get to the pills just like I learned from Steve .. you take them out of the sweetbox ...'

or something (not a very good attempt, but you catch my drift)
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